In the warmth of her parents’ suburban home, under the glow of masterfully strung Christmas lights, Emma found herself the star of a celebration toast that she knew was coming. The family was gathered on the Saturday before Christmas, their annual tradition, and while she loved coming back home for the holidays, this time she felt different. At the dinner, her father initiated the toast. He looked across the table and said, “To Emma, and her incredible promotion to Associate at Madson Bailey. She’s always been our rock star.” Then he winked at Emma and added, “to her continued climb up the Wall Street ladder so that she can pay back private school tuition and help us retire.” Her dad had always cracked jokes like this. To her, she knew it was a party his harmless attempt to be funny sprinkled with some unresolved insecurities. In the past, these sorts of comments never bothered her but this time, his words felt heavy, like they contained some sort of explicit agreement about how she should spend her life.
This is good feedback. The original draft was pretty bad but this was a lot better. I think a lot of the opportunities come from me just not being that good at fiction yet
I can really relate to this thank you so much. Major cliffhanger. I hope Emma went back to Costa Rica ☺️
What a cliffhanger! I need to know what happens to Emma next (even though I’ve met people like Emma many times over the last 7 years).
lol it’s up to you how it ends
Also,I’d love to see the transcript of how you used ChatGPT to create this. Really cool stuff. 👍
This is good feedback. The original draft was pretty bad but this was a lot better. I think a lot of the opportunities come from me just not being that good at fiction yet